Wednesday, March 20, 2019

THE DEVIL'S IN THE DETAILS--MAIN CHARACTERS by CHERYL PIERSON


Are you the kind of reader who likes to have a detailed description of the hero or heroine in romance books? What about other secondary characters? And do you feel the same way about characters in books of genres other than western historical romance, or romance in general?

To me, there is a big difference in how much character description is needed in romance novels versus other genres, and here’s why.

When we read romance, we put ourselves in the story, empathizing with both the heroine and the hero. Of course, we need enough description to let us be familiar with them both, but this might be a case of “less” being “more.”

In our personal lives, we have preferences in how our romantic “leading men” look, speak, behave, and so on. If our preferences are toward the tall, dark, and handsome hero, it will be hard for us to be vested in a story with a hero who’s short, fair, and ugly. Or one who has habits we personally don’t find attractive.

I knew a woman who didn’t like blond heroes. If he had blond hair on the cover, she’d color it brown or black with a marker. In the book, if “blond” was mentioned, she’d mark through it and write whatever color of hair she’d decided he needed. I asked her about the heroines. “They’re all me,” she answered. “I don’t pay attention to their descriptions.”

It made me wonder how many others felt this way.

Stephen King had mentioned at one time in his book ON WRITING that “description begins in the writer’s imagination, but should finish in the reader’s.”
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And in genres other than romance, character description is different and maybe more important, because the reader doesn’t have any preconceived expectations of the story, such as romance readers do.

When I taught creative writing classes, this description was one I used to illustrate how so much could be packed in to a short amount of words without being an info dump.

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This is the beginning of St. Agnes’ Stand, by Thomas Eidson, who also wrote The Missing. Take a look:

He was hurt and riding cautiously. Thoughts not quite grasped made him uneasy, and he listened for an errant sound in the hot wind. His eyes were narrowed—searching for a broken leaf, a freshly turned rock, anything from which he could make some sense of his vague uneasiness. Nothing. The desert seemed right, but wasn’t somehow. He turned in the saddle and looked behind him. A tumbleweed was bouncing in front of the wild assaults from the wind. But the trail was empty. He turned back and sat, listening.

Over six feet and carrying two hundred pounds, Nat Swanson didn’t disturb easy, but this morning he was edgy. His hat brim was pulled low, casting his face in shadow. The intense heat and the wind were playing with the air, making it warp and shimmer over the land. He forced himself to peer through it, knowing he wouldn’t get a second chance if he missed a sheen off sweating skin or the straight line of a gun barrel among branches.


And then this, a couple of paragraphs down:

He had been running for a week, and he was light on sleep and heavy on dust and too ready for trouble. He’d killed a man in a West Texas town he’d forgotten the name of—over a woman whose name he’d never known. He hadn’t wanted the woman or the killing. Nor had he wanted the hole in his thigh. What he did want was to get to California, and that’s where he was headed. Buttoned in his shirt pocket was a deed for a Santa Barbara ranch. Perhaps a younger man would have run longer and harder before turning to fight and maybe die; but Nat Swanson was thirty-five years that summer, old for the trail, and he had run as far as he was going to run.

I absolutely love this. Can you feel that you’re right there with Nat Swanson as he’s riding? There are no wasted words, and this is just such an eloquent, masterful description of not only Nat, but the situation and the physical place he’s in as well as the dilemma he’s faced with.

Another excellent way of describing a character and setting the scene at the same time is from another character’s POV. This passage is from Jack Schaefer’s iconic classic, Shane—from the eyes of Bobby Starrett—when Shane first rides into his life.

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This is just the very beginning of the book—there is more physical description of Shane a few paragraphs later, but I chose this passage because it lets us know what’s going on in a few short sentences—and that is real talent.

He rode into our valley in the summer of ’89. I was a kid then, barely topping the backboard of father’s old chuck-wagon. I was on the upper rail of our small corral, soaking in the late afternoon sun, when I saw him far down the road where it swung into the valley from the open plain beyond.

In that clear Wyoming air I could see him plainly, though he was still several miles away. There seemed nothing remarkable about him, just another stray horseman riding up the road toward the cluster of frame buildings that was our town. Then I saw a pair of cowhands, loping past him, stop and stare after him with a curious intentness.

He came steadily on, straight through the town without slackening pace, until he reached the fork a half-mile below our place. One branch turned left across the river ford and on to Luke Fletcher’s big spread. The other bore ahead along the right bank where we homesteaders had pegged our claims in a row up the valley. He hesitated briefly, studying the choice, and moved again steadily on our side.

This is tough, because we’re seeing it through two “lenses”—Bobby is nine years old, and this is what he sees, but it’s filtered by the adult Bobby who’s now telling the story of what happened all those years ago.

In writing the story this way, the reader gets the full impact of experiencing the fears, the situation brings, the joy of having Shane there, and the anguish of his leaving all through the eyes of a nine-year-old boy, with the adult overview that lets us know that Shane was not a hero—but he was to Bobby and those small time settlers who needed one so desperately. Yet, leaving was the only thing he could have done and kept Bobby’s view of him untarnished and intact.

Because we don’t know how the story will end, and we don’t know what to expect, we are learning about Shane’s character right along with Bobby so we are actively looking for details and descriptors the author might give us along the way—it will affect our opinion of Shane and let us know if Bobby is a reliable narrator, and it affects the outcome of the story.

I bring this up because in romance, seldom does the description have such a direct effect on the story itself, unless our main characters have scars, afflictions, or disabilities that might have some direct bearing on the story and its outcome.
So what do you think? Do you like a lot of description and detail about the WHR heroes you read about, or would you rather “fill in the blanks” for yourself?

As far as heroines go, most people I’ve talked to are not as concerned wither physical description (maybe because each person sees herself in the heroine?) but are more concerned with her personality traits—is she likable? Is she determined?

If she is not a fierce match for the hero, the story line is doomed.

And what about our hero? Though he can get away with more “questionable” traits, he has to be endowed with almost superhuman strength to overcome everything that’s thrown his way, and that is description that must be thoroughly detailed—not left to the reader’s interpretation.
(I apologize for the Amazon links being all over the place--I could not get them to "stick" under the book covers.)

17 comments:

  1. another great post. Thanks Cheryl.

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    1. Thank you, Frank! I really enjoy writing these posts about details in our writing/reading and why it’s more important in some genres than in others. I have a series of these planned if I ever get time to write them all. So glad you dropped by!

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  2. Wonderful excerpts there. A masterclass.

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    1. Christine, these are from two of my very favorite books. You can see why. The writing flows so beautifully and is so descriptive. So glad you stopped by today!

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  3. I love this post, Cheryl. Especially the quote by Stephen King, which I had heard before and is one of my favorites. I guess that I tend to let the reader fill in the blanks, but that might be because I'm lazy and I would rather write dialogue.

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    1. Michael, I am that way too. I love to write dialogue and there is so much you can tell about your characters through what they say, and what they DON'T say. LOL So glad you stopped by!

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  4. Great post, Cheryl. Made me think about the way I like my characters described. I guess I prefer the tall dark hero, though (I'm about to show my age) at one time I was in love with Troy Donahue.

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    1. Agnes, I'm like you--there is a reason for that phrase "tall, dark, and handsome"--a lot of people like that "type"-- but I have read romance stories with other types of heroes that were appealing, as well. Sometimes just a generalized description is FINE. My mind 'goes there' anyhow. LOL

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  5. Excellent post, Cheryl. It is never easy making the characters seem natural and believable.

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    1. Keith, it is hard, isn't it? You worry that if you give them certain characteristics, others might not see them the same way you do. Romance aside, we must worry about that even with our "heroes" and "heroines" in other genres. So glad you stopped by today!

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  6. Loved it, Cheryl. Those fine points are worth a bunch.

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    1. Jerry, thanks so much for stopping by. I'm glad you enjoyed it--I think this is really important because it's something we might not think about as we are writing, but our readers will notice. And my gosh, the way Eidson and Schaefer both managed to add so many great details in such an interesting way is something I want to study more and learn to do better!

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  7. Posts like these are such wonderful reminders. Sometimes we get so involved in telling the story, we will forget these important 'little' details. Thanks. Doris

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    1. Right, Foris. And maybe it’s me, but as I’ve gotten older, I really don’t care about what was served for dinner unless it has meaning, or what each person wore to the ball. What I care more about are the conversational nuances, etc. so maybe that changes with age/genre.

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    2. Doris I know how to spell your name but autocorrect is ever-helpful.

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  8. Both novels are on my keeper shelf. I need to go back and read them again. The excerpts are enjoyable to read just by themselves!

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    1. They are both wonderful, aren’t they? I can’t say enough good about both of them! Glad to know a kindred spirit!

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